Writing Concisely

Writing Concisely Assignment

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1.  Our credit union prohibits the cashing of third-party checks.

2.  You may attend the two-day workshop.

3.  You have been approved to enroll in our management trainee program.

Conversational/Professional

4.  The printer toner and supplies are being sent to your Oakdale office.

5.  Inform the undersigned whether or not your representative will be visiting soon.

Positive expression:

6.  Customers are ineligible for the 10 percent discount unless they show their membership cards.

7.  We must withhold remuneration until you complete the job satisfactorily.

8.  Please approve the building plans before construction begins.

9.  Please provide your phone number so we can process your application.

Inclusive

10.  Every employee is entitled to see their personnel file.

11.  Any applicant for the position of fire fighter must submit a medical report signed by their physician.

12.  All conference participants and their spouses are invited to the banquet.

Plain English

13.  Please advise if we should continue contact despite confusing profits.

14.  He realized that the vehicle was not working because of a faulty gasket.

Active/Passive

15.  The manager purchased office supplies with a company credit card.

16.  Banks process checks faster because of new regulations.

17.  Laws prohibit the use of social security numbers as identification to protect students.

18.  FedEx scans millions of packages every night as they stream through its Memphis hub.

Parallelism

19.  To improve your listening skills, you should remain quiet and keep your mind open to new ideas and thoughts.