Paper Case

The first thing that I saw was the opening sentence requires a little more substance. It needed to be talked about a little more than it was. In the second sentence there should be a comma. Also the last sentence in paragraph one is a run on. When ever you are inserting the word and, a comma should be placed before. In the third paragraph the writer starts the last sentence by saying unlike most comic book movies. There should be a comma after movies. The first sentence should have been switched with the second sentence. I would have introduced my paper with “Unlike most popular summer movies The Dark Knight was also considered to be a quality film and was thought to be a contender to earn an academy award nomination,” instead of “The Dark Knight was the most popular film of 2008. One thing that I would not change is in the third paragraph the writer compared the movie to the way movies were back in the eighties and nineties. In paragraph five the writer quoted something from Wikipedia but did not do citations. That would count as plagiarism because the reader is thinking it is the writer’s words, but in actuality it was taken from knowledge based site.

When I was in academic writing, I was told to underline important names, states, and countries. I see that there is capitalization but none of the names are underlined. I do give the writer credit though because each paragraph has its own topic sentence. You do know what the paragraph is going to be about. Also, when writing a paper you are not supposed to use numbers, they should be written out. The grammar aspect of the paper has a lot to be desired. There are a lot of sentences where the verb does not agree with the subject. I know in academic writing contractions are not to be used, but in casual writing they are acceptable. The writer uses contractions such as It’s when it should have been It is. Another mistake that my eye caught was that the writer used It a tremendous amount of times. Instead