People Who Work Hard

People who work hard and sleep late at night are hard-working people who will have success in their lives, while people who take naps during the day and sleep a lot at night are lazy. Agree or disagree with this agreement.

Although many people might agree with this statement, I do not think it is necessarily true in terms of their sleeping hours and health. (Is the introduction too short?) (THAT'S ALL RIGHT)

First of all, I believe that people who work hard and sleep very late at night are doing themselves more harm than good. By the next day WHEN they going/GO to work, they will probably feel tired, so they have no energy to continue their work. I have experienced this situation myself. Once I studied diligently for an upcoming math test till two o’clock in the evening, I could not keep myself awake during the test. Also, I had trouble(s) remembering the formulas and how to solve the questions. When my test result came out, I could not believe that I forgot/HAD FORGOTTEN to write the last page, which was about twenty percent of the test. Therefore, from my experience, I believe that people who study hard and sleep late at night will not necessarily have success in their lives.

Second, the statement that “People who take naps during the day and sleep a lot at night are lazy” cannot be said to/ABOUT everyone. Some people may be tired from their work, and they must take a nap in order to sustain their energy. In fact, according to my biology’s/BIOLOGY teacher, students who sleep at ten o’clock and take a few naps during the day do better in their exams than students who sleep at two o’clock at night studying FOR their exams. This is because sleeping nails their memories down. The longer you sleep, the longer is your memory, and the better you do in exams./THE LONGER YOUR MEMORY IS,THE BETTER YOU DO IN EXAMS

In my opinion, the statement should be readjusted to READ THUS this: “People who